Can someone check my autobiography, please?

This biography is written without flourishes and small details and more descriptive information. From that point of view it is a good piece. There is always a "however" whenever I provide a compliment. Mine is this. If you are writing this to tell something about you it is very informative, but it is dull. It is OK if you were writing a biography for a job. However, if you were writing to tell someone whom you had great affection for, a boyfriend, it is dull. Think about the purpose of your autobiography, is it for a boyfriend, a college application, or a job application. This one is for a job application. It should be different if it was for a boyfriend or a college application. Think about this. Good luck